Friday, February 08, 2008

Haiku Friday

Haiku Friday

I can't seem to show
my children the cardinals
frequenting our trees.

Catching a glimpse of
the male's outrageous scarlet,
I look for his mate.

She's harder to see
in winter's bare branches. "Come
see the cardinals, "

I say. By the time
faces press to windows, he's
moved and now hidden.

My marker gone, I
fail at showing the female,
a calm brown perched close.

"I can never find
the girl. She's so plain," one cries.
She is almost right.

The female is a
waning dusk, or the bright light
of a gray morning,

or a tangle of
stripped branches. She is subtle,
lovely, faithful, there.

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14 comments:

suchsimplepleasures said...

what great haikus! it's so true...when you go to point out the birds, by the time the child even gets to the window...it's gone!!
have an awesome weekend!

slouching mom said...

kelly -- IMO, this is your best yet. brilliant.

you could easily publish this somewhere.

Kathryn said...

Gorgeous haiku! Well done!!

secret agent mama said...

That was absolutely wonderful! You've got haiku skillz!!

Gwen said...

oooh, this is a good one, Kelly. I love the description of the female cardinal.

pootandcubby said...

Wow. You always take Haiku Friday to a totally new level. This was beautifully done.

-andi

bubandpie said...

I've always loved the subtlety of female cardinals.

Mrs. Chicken said...

You are too good at this. You must consider submitting some of these - especially this one - to a journal.

janet said...

well played!

flutter said...

You are brilliant at this, seriously.

ltgw said...

Beautiful! I miss you Kel and Northeast!!!

If I could fade into the background sometimes. Not have to do things my way. My hubby and I would get along, on his roller coaster of moodswings. As long as it is only sometimes.

storyteller said...

What a lovely Haiku, and how fun to try to share this nature experience with your children. I hope they eventually get to see for themselves.
Hugs and blessings,

Ophelia Rising said...

Lovely.

Bon said...

i'm late to this Kelly, but i second the others...it's brilliant. like a small, perfect short story told in rhythm.