
I can't seem to show
my children the cardinals
frequenting our trees.
Catching a glimpse of
the male's outrageous scarlet,
I look for his mate.
She's harder to see
in winter's bare branches. "Come
see the cardinals, "
I say. By the time
faces press to windows, he's
moved and now hidden.
My marker gone, I
fail at showing the female,
a calm brown perched close.
"I can never find
the girl. She's so plain," one cries.
She is almost right.
The female is a
waning dusk, or the bright light
of a gray morning,
or a tangle of
stripped branches. She is subtle,
lovely, faithful, there.
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14 comments:
what great haikus! it's so true...when you go to point out the birds, by the time the child even gets to the window...it's gone!!
have an awesome weekend!
kelly -- IMO, this is your best yet. brilliant.
you could easily publish this somewhere.
Gorgeous haiku! Well done!!
That was absolutely wonderful! You've got haiku skillz!!
oooh, this is a good one, Kelly. I love the description of the female cardinal.
Wow. You always take Haiku Friday to a totally new level. This was beautifully done.
-andi
I've always loved the subtlety of female cardinals.
You are too good at this. You must consider submitting some of these - especially this one - to a journal.
well played!
You are brilliant at this, seriously.
Beautiful! I miss you Kel and Northeast!!!
If I could fade into the background sometimes. Not have to do things my way. My hubby and I would get along, on his roller coaster of moodswings. As long as it is only sometimes.
What a lovely Haiku, and how fun to try to share this nature experience with your children. I hope they eventually get to see for themselves.
Hugs and blessings,
Lovely.
i'm late to this Kelly, but i second the others...it's brilliant. like a small, perfect short story told in rhythm.
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